| #1 angrysalad[40446] |
| 209-30-176-146.flash.net |
| yay! first! |
| #2 gosu 2nd!![40449] |
| spider-ta035.proxy.aol.com |
| i got 2!! |
| #3 shockwave[40451] |
| exchange1.sensable.com |
| You guys couldn't have possibly read the story already :-b. Heh, someone should write a script that just removes the first few comments ;-). |
| #4 WilliamWC3[40452] |
| huru27.wuh.wustl.edu |
| I haven't read it yet, but I think you have some html problems. Atleast on my pc. Like black tables with black text. I'll see if I can find the problem. Looks good otherwise. |
| #5 angrysalad[40453] |
| 209-30-176-146.flash.net |
| no such thing. I've read it now, but it seems to be disjointed at the moment. I hope all these characters will come together and make sense later, right? |
| #6 shockwave[40454] |
| exchange1.sensable.com |
Hmm HTML errors? Please specify what you see, and I'll try to correct them.
Angrysalad - Yes, this is a novel, not the usual short stories that like the fanfics you usually see here. Thus, the timeframe between when characters are introduced and when they are actually developed will tend to be a bit longer. Unfortunately, unlike with paper novels, you can't just read chapter 2 immediately after 1, so you're left hanging :-b, since it depends on how fast I can post them.
I'll try to get Chapt 2 up as soon as possible, it does most of the job of clearing up things. |
#7  [40455] |
| strangers.bragg.army.mil |
| Damnit Shock. I ran out of pages just as it was getting good. Write more. |
| #8 TriggaPlay aka gosu 2nd[40456] |
| spider-ta035.proxy.aol.com |
| wow, good story. Nice twist at the end. |
| #9 p|-|3arm3[40457] |
| lrar5pp17.alltel.net |
Damnit you whoreish bastard! Write! Write! Write!
I want to see the 2nd chapter! |
| #10 [40465] |
| strangers.bragg.army.mil |
| Netscape is the devil. |
| #11 JimtheCar[40480] |
| cx110054-a.pwy1.sdca.home.com |
it owns cause i have to highlight half of it to read it =P
and look at this off centered deal with marks comment it's trippy |
| #12 JimtheCar[40483] |
| cx110054-a.pwy1.sdca.home.com |
| woah...i'm in the wrong frame. it's like i was in a time machine or box of cereal or something oOoOoOoOo |
| #13 Krebster[40488] |
| spider-tl052.proxy.aol.com |
nice writing shock i actually read this, i usually just stare blankly at pictures
*wonders what happened to comment section* |
| #14 Krebster[40489] |
| spider-tl052.proxy.aol.com |
mark broke it
wasnt me |
| #15 [40496] |
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| It was Yoshi actually. That bastard. |
| #16 WilliamWC3[40503] |
| huru27.wuh.wustl.edu |
| Shock, I don't know why this is but in my browser (maybe its screwed up somehow) whenever you have a table you have to reset the font attributes inside the table. Otherwise the font reverts to the default which is black. Thus, in your black tables, the font shows up black. I can read it by highlighting. Just thought you should know. Does anyone else have this problem? What is wrong with my browser? I'm using Neoplanet but I think it is the same in IE. Anyway good story. |
| #17 shockwave[40520] |
| exchange1.sensable.com |
| Check, I fixed that in the next chapter. Hmm maybe I should ask them to delete this one and I can resubmit with the correction? In any case, if this report disappears, then I'll resubmit and add the table color tags. |
| #18 JimtheCar[40522] |
| cx110054-a.pwy1.sdca.home.com |
| oh, now that you fixed it, i just look like an idiot =P anyway, the story looks really good so far, you'd better skip work for the next week or two so y ou can finish it =) |
| #19 FuRyEDge[40532] |
| kite.ics.uci.edu |
| I like it! Nice beginning. =oD |
| #20 TaloN[40537] |
| cx110054-a.pwy1.sdca.home.com |
| I have the same problem as Will, it shows black text on black background, except for the beginning. And i use IE |
| #21 ScreamStalker[40583] |
| 167.93.53.229 |
| Excellent. No problems with text here. It was a little disjointed in the beginning with the letter and all, but I really liked the characters created in the latter part of the chapter. I'll definetly be following up on this story. |
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