| #1 Napoleic[57351] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
| May as well delete the first one... |
| #2 GammaRayBurst[57352] |
| as3-2-86.HIP.Berkeley.EDU |
Wow, part 2 was kinda morbid. A very interesting story. I of course found it particularly interesting, but I had a vested interest in it. Anyway, I liked it. Good job.
-GRB |
| #3 Napoleic[57354] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
| Yeah the first part was just to make you like all the characters. The second part was my rendition of a survivor/horror/extreme circumstances causing bonding sort of story. It wasnt supposed to be no comedy anways... |
| #4 GameOverZ[57368] |
| ppp54.c5300-3.day-oh.siscom.net |
| hehe. What a long story! You put good effort into it; i can tell. |
| #5 Napoleic[57374] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
| Took me about 7 hours to get it all down. It's all based on a dream I had last night. Pretty sick puppy, ain't I. Only in the dream, we all die. I just couldn't bring myself to kill all my characters that way ;) |
| #6 Punisher[57389] |
| ktce2.156ce.singa.pore.net |
Nice one...
Include me in the next one. |
| #7 BW-sux[57397] |
| spider-we022.proxy.aol.com |
I don't like reading fanfics anymore. :(
BW-sux |
| #8 Crusador[57438] |
| ip185.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| good fanfic now im getting dizzy from all that reading. Gj but 7 hours!?!?!?!??!!?!? thats a long time to write something. If you were me I would have just done battlecruiser killed 5 men got out crashed on planet 1 died swam to shore The End. but your not me so gj anyways. |
| #9 Crusador[57439] |
| ip185.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| good fanfic now im getting dizzy from all that reading. Gj but 7 hours!?!?!?!??!!?!? thats a long time to write something. If you were me I would have just done battlecruiser killed 5 men got out crashed on planet 1 died swam to shore The End. but your not me so gj anyways. |
| #10 Crusador[57440] |
| ip185.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| good fanfic now im getting dizzy from all that reading. Gj but 7 hours!?!?!?!??!!?!? thats a long time to write something. If you were me I would have just done battlecruiser killed 5 men got out crashed on planet 1 died swam to shore The End. but your not me so gj anyways. |
| #11 Crusador[57441] |
| ip185.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| good fanfic now im getting dizzy from all that reading. Gj but 7 hours!?!?!?!??!!?!? thats a long time to write something. If you were me I would have just done battlecruiser killed 5 men got out crashed on planet 1 died swam to shore The End. but your not me so gj anyways. |
| #12 Crusador[57442] |
| ip185.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| good fanfic now im getting dizzy from all that reading. Gj but 7 hours!?!?!?!??!!?!? thats a long time to write something. If you were me I would have just done battlecruiser killed 5 men got out crashed on planet 1 died swam to shore The End. but your not me so gj anyways. |
| #13 Crusador[57443] |
| ip185.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| good fanfic now im getting dizzy from all that reading. Gj but 7 hours!?!?!?!??!!?!? thats a long time to write something. If you were me I would have just done battlecruiser killed 5 men got out crashed on planet 1 died swam to shore The End. but your not me so gj anyways. |
| #14 Crusador[57444] |
| ip185.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| good fanfic now im getting dizzy from all that reading. Gj but 7 hours!?!?!?!??!!?!? thats a long time to write something. If you were me I would have just done battlecruiser killed 5 men got out crashed on planet 1 died swam to shore The End. but your not me so gj anyways. |
| #15 Crusador[57445] |
| ip185.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| good fanfic now im getting dizzy from all that reading. Gj but 7 hours!?!?!?!??!!?!? thats a long time to write something. If you were me I would have just done battlecruiser killed 5 men got out crashed on planet 1 died swam to shore The End. but your not me so gj anyways. |
| #16 Crusador[57446] |
| ip185.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| er..... oops hmmm maybe you just might break that 17 comment record anyways... :) |
| #17 Bane[57448] |
| fcs01asm.asm.bellsouth.net |
Wow, dude, that was extremely long...but extremely interesting =] I doubt a whole lot of people will be willing to read this entire thing hehe =]
I did, however; I'd like to give this a 7.5 but I'll have to round it up =]
Bane |
| #18 heh[57462] |
| cr467192-a.slnt1.on.wave.home.com |
| heh |
| #19 19[57463] |
| cr467192-a.slnt1.on.wave.home.com |
| 19 |
| #20 [LoR]-Latron-[57471] |
| 06-090.036.popsite.net |
| Good work! |
| #21 Napoleic[57472] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
NOOOO 19 again! And good god most of them were that refresh happy Crusader ;)
I must take my fate into my own hands...
BTW Punisher, I didn't include you because I don't know your name! |
| #22 GammaRayBurst[57473] |
| q.ssl.berkeley.edu |
his first name is Caleb. it's on the site...
-GRB |
| #23 Napoleic[57483] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
| Yeah I'm well aware of that much. I need his last name too though. And he wasn't on icq at the time like Zarak was, so I couldn't get it. |
| #24 Curly[57487] |
| c787321-a.spokn1.wa.home.com |
| You killed me you bastard! How could you! Except for that little "mistake" it was an enjoyable read. Couldn't I have at least died blowing shit up? |
| #25 Regehr[57494] |
| proxy2.klht1.bc.home.com |
yes, well at least you didnt just up and stab yourself in the eye.
did i have an itch there? was there no other way? |
| #26 Dr.Zchivago[57513] |
| proxy1-external.bremtn1.wa.home.com |
Hmm, I really enjoyed the read of the first part a whole lot more than the second part.
And I really didn't like seeing almost the entire first post again on part two. Made it excruciatingly long.
Bleh, there were huge paragraphs I got lost in. The only reason I kept reading was because I know who you based your characters off of.
But I read it. I didn't like it.
I didn't like it very much at all.
But what I did not like was the story and actions of the people involved. For you to make me not like the story is good though I guess.
The best part, I thought, was Regehr sticking a knife in his eye. You got a laugh out of me for that. =)
But, the bottom line is I didn't really care for this that much and I was even in the damn thing. Don't take it the wrong way Nap, this fan fic stuff is really so totally not my cup of tea.
-Dr.Z |
| #27 Dr.Zchivago[57535] |
| proxy1-external.bremtn1.wa.home.com |
| For clarification, your writing is good. It moved me... just the wrong way I suppose. |
| #28 Napoleic[57543] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
Im confused...
And I thought people hated it when they had to read the story in separate installments. I thought thats what you wanted?
And by the way, I indented my paragraphs when I was writing it, I just didn't realise you had to use the paragraph tag to make it indented on the actual br :(
I'm disapointed that you didn't like it though :(
You're opinion is very important to me :( |
| #29 RhinoAssUgly[57545] |
| bc-pgr-a53-01-75.look.ca |
Hrmmm.
Methinks I'm gonna take a leave of absence.
Seems fan-fics are becoming a point of contention.
=( |
| #30 RhinoAssUgly[57547] |
| bc-pgr-a53-01-75.look.ca |
Napoleic, I really dig what you're doing. The only suggestion I could make (though it is a big one) is that there needs to be more fluffy junk between the big stints of dialogue. Meaning : more description.
But then, I'm big on rattling on about details.
Kool. GW. |
| #31 Napoleic[57555] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
Heh thanks for the props RAU, but I just don't have the same dramatic flair as you do with your descriptions, so for the most part I tried to stick to my strong points, mainly theme and character developement. As a side note, I'm glad you got a 9 on your last fanfic, cuz there's no way this should be beating it ;)
I have ample vocabulary, but I just don't take the time, and it just doesn't quite come naturally to me. Plus I'm influenced by what I'm currently reading, which frankly ain't much right now :( Gotta go to the library...
either that or reread your story before starting on my next one ;)
I'm surprised that so many people that don't know me still liked the story. I pretty much figured it was a hack unless you got the inside jokes and so forth. Kinda inspires me to write a new story :)
Well we'll see what fucked up dreams I have tonight, perhaps I'll be inspired again. We shall see.
BTW, I'm Hautamaki. I wonder if you can guess which characters GammaRayBurst and Dr.Zchivago were.... |
| #32 skicker[57582] |
| ec138.eotvos.elte.hu |
| too many *fucks* and *shits* in there, sorry |
| #33 Crusador[57609] |
| ip74.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| I dont care who says it but imho your story rocks. it's like a good refreshing long book with so much action its hard to find that around these days........ :( Keep on writing!!!! gw me wan more...... more.... more.... more..... |
| #34 Crusador[57610] |
| ip74.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| I dont care who says it but imho your story rocks. it's like a good refreshing long book with so much action its hard to find that around these days........ :( Keep on writing!!!! gw me wan more...... more.... more.... more..... |
| #35 Crusador[57611] |
| ip74.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| I dont care who says it but imho your story rocks. it's like a good refreshing long book with so much action its hard to find that around these days........ :( Keep on writing!!!! gw me wan more...... more.... more.... more..... |
| #36 Crusador[57612] |
| ip74.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| I dont care who says it but imho your story rocks. it's like a good refreshing long book with so much action its hard to find that around these days........ :( Keep on writing!!!! gw me wan more...... more.... more.... more..... |
| #37 Crusador[57613] |
| ip74.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| oops..... i did it again :) |
| #38 crusador[57614] |
| ip74.memphis14.tn.pub-ip.psi.net |
| errr i just noticed that is suppose to be a :( |
| #39 Napoleic[57666] |
| 24.66.179.206.bc.wave.home.com |
| Thanx man, I guess I wil write more, at some point. Don't know when though, the mood just has to take me. |
| #40 Loonymaniac[58960] |
| 202.156.2.245 |
| I say you do another one right now!!Include me pls...i can die anyway you want but first...lemme nuke the shit out of you.haha..... |
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