| #1 scarab[76395] |
| ACABF630.ipt.aol.com |
| fcuk fuck fuck fuck |
| #2 mofo[76396] |
| dialup404.lemoorenet.com |
| I SUCKS CRAPCRAPCRAP!!! |
| #3 {~Ascension~}[76397] |
| 26.rochelle-park-01-02rs16rt.nj.dial-access.att.net |
| Lotta detail was missing. Not fun to read. |
| #4 Monty Pylon[76399] |
| gateway.Culinary.EDU |
| <font color=red>A good try at text only and o see improvements over your last report. However you need a lot more detail when dealing with a text only. This report would be better if it had pics but on't fret. Try again and carry on.</font> |
| #5 Sid6.9[76404] |
| 1Cust29.tnt3.tacoma.wa.da.uu.net |
Time for me and the things I do...
The things I liked-
-Decent writing effort. There were a few mis-spelled words, but otherwise I understood what you were meaning.
-Decent detail in the beginning with the builds and early attacks.
-The game itself was decent with both competitors attacking and counterattacking. That's vital for a battle report.
The things that could be changed-
-Umm, this is my personal preference, but only zerg spawn. Whereas Terrans land and Protoss warp. I guess it's okay for them all to spawn if you want, but to me, I like it the other way.
-I really did need some pics to understand exactly what was going on in the later parts of the game. Where you started with good detail in the beginning, it sorta trailed off at the end. And pics woulda really enhanced what you were saying.
-I'm not sure if you do your reports in word, or just do it on the Submit page. But you should do a spell-check of your report. Mis-spelled words can deter from the report. Like when talking about the Supply Depots, you kept leaving off a "p". Now I knew what you meant, but it does get irritating to see that over and over again. Also there were several other mis-spelled words. It's a good thing to proofread your reports at least 3 times before submitting it.
Personal Comments- This report was a vast improvement over your last one. You defiently used the advice on your last report and used it wisely on this one. Remember, writing Battle Reports shouldn't be work, it should be fun. The advise we've been giving you will make it so your reports will be fun to read as well, so keep trying, you are getting better. |
| #6 <font color=red>testing_testing</font>[76406] |
| 00-60-97-d5-1d-d0.bconnected.net |
| <p align=right>My firend and his brother in that clan, game may bot reflect that but it is an elite clan</p> |
| #7 tesing_esting[76407] |
| 00-60-97-d5-1d-d0.bconnected.net |
| i mean not reflect that |
| #8 Zumbooruk[76409] |
| AKCF2.xtra.co.nz |
| Pretty pictures are not essential, but pictures such as minimaps, in today's world of competitive battlereporting, are essential. |
| #9 WhiteLancer[76416] |
| nas-169-74.stockton.navipath.net |
| thansk again people for the advice, I did have a lot of fun watching this game, details are missing from the end because I dropped just before blade's attack on the expansion at top right failed, and so I was working from a summary they gave me. Otherwise I would have stuck in a few more details. |
| #10 WhiteLancer[76417] |
| nas-169-74.stockton.navipath.net |
| by the way, sid, am I your new pet project? |
| #11 Blackadder[76418] |
| hvachovsky.i001.law.columbia.edu |
Warriors of war eh. must be plenty elite.
may i suggest a name change to make it sound more menacing:
warlike wariors of war
wariors of the war of wars
warring wariors of war
or the best yet :
warring wariors of the warlike war of the warlords
but dont use that one i think ill start my own clan with that !!!
{wwotwWOW}Blackadder
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| #12 Sid6.9[76425] |
| 1Cust5.tnt13.tacoma.wa.da.uu.net |
<font color="bluelight">No, I was just teasing that one guy when I said that. No, I'm just a guy that likes to offer new battle reports advice in the hopes that they will become the new breed for battlereports.com. All the old ones left or don't write anymore, so we need as many new blood here. And I like to offer positive feedback, unlike a few people (I won't name any names), that just leave one sentence replies like..
"You suck" or "Don't do another battle report" or "This was a waste of my time."
I like to offer up some constructive advice to serious people that want to better their battle reports, that's all. The more battle reporters there are, the better. :) |
| #13 WhiteLancer[76431] |
| nas-169-74.stockton.navipath.net |
| Thanks again, working on my first with pics now. |
| #14 Napoleic[76436] |
| van2d7.dial.uniserve.ca |
Blackadder: LOL!
Whitelancer: Good text only. As has been said, the end got confusing and sparse on details, too bad you got disced. It was good up until then, I can only assume you will do better next time, with pics and hopefully watching the whole game =) |
| #15 Jherek[76452] |
| maxground.Berkeley.EDU |
Blackadder - :) I damn near LOLed when I saw what WoW stood for in the first place. Your suggestion list made it even better.
Here is another suggestion: when you start a clan have someone over 15 years old at least review the name.
Also, WL, if you are going to put a pun in the title, you don't need to explain it in the first sentence. |
| #16 Hostile~SCV[76526] |
| spider-tq044.proxy.aol.com |
Not bad for a text report.
Hostile~SCV's Pythagorean Theorem Rating- 3^2 + 4^2 = X^2
Hostile~SCV's "WTF IS THE PYTHAGOREAN THEOREM" Rating- 5 |
#17  [76582] |
| 208.196.35.239 |
This was pretty good. The details were all there. However, the writing was a little dry and the players seemed a bit mediocre (not that I'm one to talk).
4
Dref |
| #18 badtz_maru[76666] |
| barry-asy-50.rutgers.edu |
good for texti report
but i just like pics (i have probs with starin
at words with out pictures...i luv picturebooks)
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| #19 WhiteLancer[76701] |
| nas-169-130.stockton.navipath.net |
| please tell me what the hell this is, everyone agrees this was better than my last and yet its a 4.0? |
| #20 [76742] |
| Bess.CUSD.Claremont.Edu |
| indeed, but your first one wasn't exactly better then a 4 either... so it was an imporvement but not a lot. Pictures are very important in ehancing the report. |
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