| #1 ~Psi-Channeler~[77883] |
| 51.norfolk-11-12rs16rt.va.dial-access.att.net |
| Enjoy! |
| #2 Robert Frazer[77885] |
| frazers.demon.co.uk |
Not bad, but a little on the sparse side in detail.
You wrote well, but next time make sure that you don't write your whole story in italics- it gets a little painful to the eyes after a time. |
| #3 .HigH.[77898] |
| d119024.upc-d.chello.nl |
3d
and suck my dick |
| #4 CKane[77899] |
| c209662-a.haywd2.sfba.home.com |
Too many confusing names. :( Who's who??
Too damned short too,
5
mark gimme rating power gogogo |
| #5 ~(MaNiAc)~[77903] |
| px1ar.ed.wave.shaw.ca |
Make a fucking nother one this one ruled hehe
Peace Maniac |
| #6 ~Psi-Channeler~[77904] |
| 87.pittsburgh-05rs-pa-norfolk-15rs.va.dial-access.att.net |
Thanks for the comments...save #3 which was entirely pointless and is wasting space.
Glad you enjoyed it maniac =D
Later,
-Psi |
| #7 mattkid[77905] |
| 209.53.21.116 |
just a few things:
i understood who evreyone is CKane
When Da Next one coming out |
#8  [77921] |
| 653234hfc145.tampabay.rr.com |
wow, 3 paragraphs of utter shit in an obscure unreadable italic font
cant say i expected more from you |
| #9 +AnathemA+[77923] |
| phnxdslgw9poolC244.phnx.uswest.net |
| bob kills me |
| #10 ~Psi-Channeler~[77927] |
| 87.pittsburgh-05rs-pa-norfolk-15rs.va.dial-access.att.net |
| yeah uh actually...that was supposed to be in regular text and indented but the indentation got lost between me typing it and sending it. |
| #11 Scarab[77931] |
| AC8A8028.ipt.aol.com |
| ditto ana |
| #12 SlingsNArrows[77952] |
| bgm-24-95-150-230.stny.rr.com |
| Fan Fics are much better in large chunks - but I don't think many people on the site read them even when they are complete :o |
| #13 Cearas[77983] |
| proxy-02.pe.iqnet.net.au |
| Bob > this. |
| #14 jeezumcrow[78016] |
| 205.181.240.133 |
nice, not bad at all, italics are fine and i didnt mind it short, its good to leave it there, for the next part, anyhow i dont have much patience reading fan fics on the web, so having it in short parts is a lot better.
nice presentation as well, and i didnt see much grammatical mistakes or what not. good job over all.
bob the kid thinks he's cool |
| #15 Xel~Naga[78038] |
| 242862hfc88.tampabay.rr.com |
Bah, the italics are fine...
I read halfway through it and well, being as lazy as I am, decided to read the rest later. ;p
In any case, write the next one Psi! |
| #16 ~Psi-Channeler~[78050] |
| 141.norfolk-05-10rs16rt.va.dial-access.att.net |
Thanks Xel and Den. Xel I'm writing the next one at 4 am next Sunday when I cant sleep because I slept till 2PM Saturday.
Den, yes, I think Bob rates by how many minutes of reading he uses before achieving mental capacity, being why so many reports get 1's.
J/k Bob.
Later,
Psi |
#17  [78140] |
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| Write more at one time. Short fan fiction sucks. Good short fan fiction sucks, bad short fan fiction is ok cuz at least its over. |
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