| #1 PsychoChimpy[99279] |
| spider-wg031.proxy.aol.com |
| FIRST firstfirstfirstfirstfirstfirstfirstfirstfirstfirstfirstfirstfirst ok BR |
| #2 +Mep+[99280] |
| 24.245.3.1 |
| Second. |
| #3 Eradicate~Me[99281] |
| pa-millscreek2a-123.buf.adelphia.net |
| wtf is this |
| #4 ~TheDarkOne~[99282] |
| 138.89.74.187 |
| Ok it sucked I know, way too short, but it was my first. |
| #5 Waxwing[99283] |
| 138.89.74.187 |
| Good report. I like your style. Look forward to seeing some more reports from you, Dark. |
| #6 [SM]Strega~F[99285] |
| proxy4.senet.com.au |
Erad, in answer to your question, this is your report without really cool pictures or a decent layout.
=)
I'm pretty sure that this will get a 3 or 4. Sorry Dark.
Strega |
| #7 KroKey[99286] |
| spider-ta073.proxy.aol.com |
| Big bold green text on white background = eyes going blind |
| #8 Monty Pylon[99287] |
| 1Cust21.tnt10.norwalk.ct.da.uu.net |
| One small hint, even if the game isn't the best, don't say it's going to suck in the first paragraph. A good first report with a poor game. A better game and you could make a hell of a BR. |
| #9 Shadow D'Arc[99288] |
| spider-we074.proxy.aol.com |
Nice report on an admittedly crappy game. Too wide though. My poor 800X600 doesn't like it. Some text bled into side of pictures, Green on White is almost as ugly as my boss. Easier to BR a game you aren't playing(Bob's Obs rules). Other than that, welcome aboard. T_Mac is gay.
Peace,
Shadow D'Arc |
| #10 Franklin James[99290] |
| mkc-163-153-30.kc.rr.com |
Gay gay gay gay gay-Me
Gay gay gay gay gay gay gay gay-This report |
| #11 ~TheDarkOne~[99296] |
| 138.89.71.114 |
Yeah I sorta knew I probably shoulda picked a better game thing is, lately I haven't had much better games (sad I know)
~Thanks For all the consturctive critisism
& useful advice (cept #10 not that I take his comment seirously and well I sorta get what #3s saying with every report being a gold nowadays this dosen't seem too good,) right before a trip to Washington D.C.for a week so you won't here anything from me for 2 weeks,oh and btw which kinda pics look better with text inside, Gifs or Jpegs? Well seeya in a few weeks (Or whenever I find a good game, I've probably got the
This comment is so long it could be a really gay BR
by ~TheDarkOne~ |
| #12 ~TheDarkOne~ Cont.[99297] |
| 138.89.71.114 |
time to do it in one day
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| #13 ~#12/11~[99299] |
| 138.89.71.114 |
| Uh anyway just one more quick Question how do you ask to ob a game? |
| #14 the person who posted 3 times in one minutw[99300] |
| 138.89.71.114 |
| Just one last thing, sorry If I'm offendening you by calling you you're numbers (so many names, not enough time) |
#15  [99304] |
| 63.173.178.6 |
This shows potential. Serious.
You need to develop your html and pic skills a lot tho. When you do transitional visuals, with a few scenes and arrows, put a border around the individual scenes so you can tell them apart.
Leave more text space beside your pics, or none at all. Having only a few words on a line is sorta annoying.
I can tell you really tried, and this shows a "lot" of potential. You have all the tools of the really good reporters, you just need to develop them a lot more. I suggest you hang in clan ~nohunters and try your next report on a 1v1 of some known people, that tends to get a better reception. Don't give up 'cuz your first report wasn't perfect.
Mark4 |
| #16 Eradicate~Me[99305] |
| pa-millscreek2a-123.buf.adelphia.net |
| strega, just plz plz stfu |
| #17 -{KoA}-Insomnia[99307] |
| ACB63C37.ipt.aol.com |
screw u comment number 7 you're just not pure enough to be able to appreciate pure things... like green and white, green and white are awesome.
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| #18 |]agomar[99324] |
| StCatherines-ppp109174.sympatico.ca |
Reminds me vaguely of some of my first work. There's alotta room for improvement here, but it's a promising first br.
For one, you don't follow the book. I like that. I enjoy seeing someone who doesn't automatically adopt the most popular styles. You seem to be ready to folow your own way to top of the line reporting, rather than resting on what's already been done to get there.
Enough of that. Let's get to what can be improved on.
Firstly, take a look at the collages. You need to make people be able to differentiate between different images. A shot of a probe mining mixed with some completely different image on similar terrain gives me a mild headache :). So, borders are something you can work on. But, again, beware of falling into the trap of making your images exactly the same as everyone else's. And especially get away from repeating your style in report after report - there's a deathtrap I think I ALMOST . . . but not quite . . . fell into twice.
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| #19 |]agomar[99325] |
| StCatherines-ppp109174.sympatico.ca |
Second, let's take a peek at your layout. Whoa. C'mon. There are some major problems here, partially because of the third subject I'll cover. The color of your text is no thx. Against black backgrounds, I personally like aqua ( but most people don't ) and everyone likes white. White backgrounds require black text most of the time, but you can get away with very dark shades of other colors. And never use bold text except for words you want emphasized. Do not, in any circumstance, use bold or italic text in a br. Also, the pics are thrown all over this br. You've got to get your house in order, and sort out the proper distribution of images and text, with alignment HTML and centering, so as to create a pleasant look and feel.
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| #20 |]agomar[99326] |
| StCatherines-ppp109174.sympatico.ca |
Third, this report has some obvious HTML problems. The images are victims of this, and so are certain other, um "glitches."
Although this doesn't warrant an entirely different section, I would also suggest you think a little harder about the humour you want to use in your text bubbles ( which are a nice touch, reminiscent of YRM - we haven't seen that in a while ).
Finally, your writing is good! I enjoyed reading about it. Probably the reason this report doesn't have/won't get bronze ( along with the effort you put into it, which is commendable for a first br ). Writing and layout are the most important parts of any report.
So, I hope that helped you out a little. I'm sure there's stuff I forgot, but you're intelligent enough to find those. All the best, and I wish you luck on your next br. |
| #21 [99327] |
| 63.173.178.6 |
| Dag, email me plz. |
| #22 DC_Tsunami[99328] |
| 97-pm3-6.ala.tularosa.net |
This is like fifty times better than a lot of 'first' battle reports. Most people are like 'oh yeah, this is my first battle report, and it's on BGH and it has no graphics and it doesn't have any paragraph or line breaks and it's really one big run-on sentence with llots fo misspelings.'
All the advice here is good; make sure you try to take all of it. The only thing I would like to add is to please proofread your reports. Like everyone else said, this shows a huge amount of potential.
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#23  [99335] |
| 63-224-57-30.dsl.uswest.net |
This is a piece of crap. I hated it.
1
Dref |
| #24 -{KoA}-Insomnia[99362] |
| ACB43EA3.ipt.aol.com |
| dag, shutup, don't tell him how to do his text. |
| #25 |]agomar[99364] |
| StCatherines-ppp109174.sympatico.ca |
| . . . |
| #26 Helpless_Victim[99415] |
| spider-wc082.proxy.aol.com |
tsunami, you purposely made your comment one big run on sentence right?¿...thought so.
nice report for a first 8)
green on white not so good 8(
fix your pics, change text color and get a better game and youre good to go :P
Helpless_Victim |
| #27 ground-LOBP-[99456] |
| syr-24-169-68-96.twcny.rr.com |
ok, i'm not the sort of person who gives +points for a "first attempt" SO -
honest rating: 3.5. but what i would give something like tsunami described would be a 1 or less if that was even possible, so it's not like you don't show potential. |
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