"I didn't expect to be beaten by someone part of "a brand new melee gaming clan" who play "all sorts of maps, preferably LT style", but still, more ridiculous stuff happens every day, I mean, I have a losing record to Keanu_Reaver for crying out loud"
- Ling-erie's A Pubbie Tourney BR
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| #1 Diluvio[101468] | | client-151-200-161-80.bellatlantic.net | | numero uno | | #2 Mep[101470] | | user-2inil07.dialup.mindspring.com | | Second...to read. | | #3 Patton1944[101473] | | spider-to013.proxy.aol.com | | If you release two(average) reports within a few days, you're doing something wrong. But on that note, it was ok. 5.5-6 | | #4 NotDefault[101479] | | h24-76-173-79.vs.shawcable.net | The report was ok. 5. Here is some constructive criticism.
Don't use "u" instead of "you". You're writing a report, put the extra time in, it isn't a race.
Get a better game. This game was of questionable quality - why didn't he notice that your hallucinated carriers weren't launching interceptors before he left the game? And why didn't you just save a bit of minerals/gas to buy storm, instead of spending it on hallucination (even though it turned out to save the game, you couldn't have known that)?
Take pictures. Although text reports can be just as good if not better than image reports, pictures can help inject more mood into your report. For example, it would be great to have had a picture of your hallucinated carriers. Another good choice would be a picture of his army crushing you in the middle. | | #5 NotDefault[101480] | | h24-76-173-79.vs.shawcable.net | Put in more details. Note that even pictures aren't an excuse for ignoring details - pictures should enhance the report, not be used as a crutch. You have a decent ammount of details already, but you could use some more. For example, when you dropped 2 Archons on his expansion's mineral line, did they die after killing the SCVs, or did they load back up in the shuttle and get away?
Break up those huge sentences. If a sentence is taking up a whole paragraph, it's too much. Avoid using "and" to often - it has its place, but it is also a temptation to make long drawn-out sentences.
Don't release so many so-so reports. If you put an effort into each one - a golden effort, you're much more likely to get gold with the report.
NotDefault | | #6 BigD[101484] | | px2so.cg.shawcable.net | | Funny just because you won with hallucinated carriers. | | #7 ArcanE[13][101492] | | 193.227.101.195 | | well u all have a point here, i'll try not to post average reports so frequently, thanks to NotDefault for all the tips, and everybody else. | | #8 [SM]Strega~F[101493] | | proxy7.senet.com.au | I see that you put a space after your commas. =)
Also, the ending was very cool, but would've worked better with pictures.
Please note: These sort of reports (winning by odd tactics) have been done very well by Drefsab. If another game such as this comes along, read over his BGH Strat Of The Week series for inspiration on how to convey how flukey the win was. These were probably Dref's best works, so it'd be a good idea to see what sort of writing styles work well.
That is all.
Strega | | #9 InfestedBashar[101496] | | c2fa9775.adsl.oleane.fr | The writing was better this time. It was pretty easy to understand what happened during the game.
I loved the way it ended. And I imagine your pleasure to watch the replay with your friend (you did it, didn't you ?).
ROFL
| | #10 RubiksCube[101498] | | platz17.pags.de | | Sounds a little made up for me. No offense, but who would research an underused spell like hallucination before the spell galore psi-storm? | | #11 Dampiere[101501] | | ares.uwimona.edu.jm | a Terran who concedes the game when he's razing your base?
didnt even try to run his scvs?
build marines or goliaths?
build depots to delay while he deconstructs your base?
*sigh*
oh well, you did a better report this time, but it still needs work.
Reread your reports before you submit and then see what you left out.
Add that.
Then Reread. Again.
Add the left out parts.
when you can read it, and it doesnt feel like it takes forever to read, nor feels boring, then you can .... email it to your friends and ask their opinions.
then reread, reconstruct and submit.
try it.
later
D
| | #12 ArcanE[13][101507] | | 193.227.101.195 | [SM]Strega~F: well what can I say, I'm a fast learner.
Yeah I saw Dref's reports, but didn't whant to copy his style, though it may come in handy.
There was no Replay for the game, as it has been played in 1.07, if only there was I, whould have submited it to the site, again, sorry.
RubiksCube:I didn't make up the game, too bad i don't have a replay to show, about hallucination, I said I didn't know what have got into me.
Dampiere:Well, what can I say, my opponent wasn't the smartest Terran around.
| | #13 4.68[101552] | | 24.128.190.214 | | Patton are you PattonBF? | | #14 Alman[102653] | | 170.seattle15rh16rt.wa.dial-access.att.net | | Good Game, but ur opponent must have been either a newb or a coward to concede before he was actually dead. |
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