| #1 john[106715] |
| adsl-63-206-88-68.dsl.snfc21.pacbell.net |
| 1st |
| #2 Adrenaling[106716] |
| CPE002078E0F4B2.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| Second is best! w00t! |
| #3 Franklin James[106717] |
| mkc-65-26-21-5.kc.rr.com |
| But third is the one with the treasure chest..so suck it, hoe! |
| #4 Forever_Knight[106718] |
| s29.dial1.pro.nac.net |
Right. Well, give me some constructive suggestions. If you don't like it, I won't write anymore. I promise.
-Forever_Knight |
| #5 Forever_Knight[106719] |
| s29.dial1.pro.nac.net |
The stumbling letters is really annoying. Why'd that happen?
-Forever_Knight |
| #6 Jekpo![106720] |
| c216-45-83-226.md1.cablespeed.com |
| Great story! 9 =) |
| #7 Nuggin0[106722] |
| spider-wm044.proxy.aol.com |
2nd non-author,non-idiot comment.
Wow, that was really good.You should write some more.Just dont make it suck like Koh_Liefoh did with the alliance and it'll be great. |
| #8 [SM]Strega~F[106726] |
| proxy8.senet.com.au |
I liked this story. I foresee a homosexual inter-racial love scene between the Zealot and the Marine guy, so I might skip that part. =/
If the rest of the story is as good as this, though, then I'll be a very happy ignoramus. GW.
Strega |
| #9 BigD[106727] |
| px2so.cg.shawcable.net |
Decent story. Good formatting. Looks nice, and you put some effort into it.
6.5 |
| #10 Patton1944[106735] |
| spider-wn083.proxy.aol.com |
Wow. That was really good. The only thing that could possibly ruin you is having a replay of your "skills" BR'ed by someone =]
Anyway, I loved it. Better than Koh. Just leave out the homosexual zealot/marine sex.Thx,gw.
"DT = Dark Templar. DT = Deep throating. Coincidence? I think not."-Patton1944 |
| #11 Rabid_Raccoon[106736] |
| A010-0011.BTVL.splitrock.net |
I almost skipped it because it was a fan fic. But once I started reading it, I found it to my liking.
8-9 |
| #12 Ownage_Mobile[106756] |
| spider-mtc-te054.proxy.aol.com |
Yes it was good, I look forward to the next chapter
9 |
| #13 Chobo~Penguine[106915] |
| FLPP-p-144-134-131-42.prem.tmns.net.au |
| man the fan fics r kik ass these days. |
| #14 Nuggin0[106946] |
| spider-tl061.proxy.aol.com |
Again really great fan fic with an intresting story, but leave out any gay sex
thats just plain disturbing |
| #15 simeon2000[107004] |
| 216.144.24.102 |
I never noticed any homo-erotic tinges in the story, although if that's what you're looking for that's what you'll find -_-
Very good story thus far. I was reading it, and waiting for you to screw up the story, but you didn't. Koh did ok for a while but then his immaturity shone through with the "milk the cows" crap and such. You're obviously older/more mature than he, and I think it's a good fanfic. Keep up the good work. |
| #16 NO)PaiN[107011] |
| spider-tf052.proxy.aol.com |
| did the marine die? why'd they run away.. |
| #17 Forever_Knight[107013] |
| 170.158.87.113 |
Um, because they got owned?
-Forever_Knight |
| #18 ShadowSoul[107021] |
| a0hr12h1y35uh.ab.hsia.telus.net |
| Good story. I give it a 8.34. =) |
| #19 Hathaway[107100] |
| ppp-206-170-29-69.wnck11.pacbell.net |
| bah, t gets owned. IMBALANCE! |
| #20 peon[107217] |
| dt060n9e.tampabay.rr.com |
| i usually start to read fanfix than quit after a while but this one wuz awesome. please hurry and write the next chapter i cant wait for it. =) |
| #21 Centralized[108783] |
| ACA97D6C.ipt.aol.com |
I was not willing to leave my executor alone with the enemy. Let the other warriors flank the Terran support force. I jogged towards the oncoming Terrans and watched while they walked slowly down the North hill. Suddenly, two Terran materialized next to me. One lifted a small projectile weapon and fired directly into my midsection. I flew nearly fifteen feet and struck the shield around the Stargate. Spitting a small gush of blood out of my mouth, I ignited my psi blades and moved towards the Terran infidels.
one problem with this. zealots dont have mouths. |
| #22 Forever_Knight[110389] |
| 170.158.87.162 |
Good point. I made it a priority of mine to make sure they never spoke out loud. It was a brief lapse into standard prose. Sorry.
-Forever_Knight |
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