| #1 huker[114564] |
| bgp559251bgs.eatntn01.nj.comcast.net |
| yes i'm fucking chobo at html sue me. |
| #2 vincible[114566] |
| roam155-218.student.harvard.edu |
I wish I had hated this story so I could have wrote that I don't hate fanfics, I just hate your fanfic.
But it was actually quite clever. Nice work. |
| #3 vincible[114567] |
| roam155-218.student.harvard.edu |
| One inconsistency: at the beginning you write that *Patrick* thinks there are ghosts (Paragaph 2) while by the end it's clear he thought nothing of the sort. |
| #4 mick[114568] |
| 1Cust13.tnt8.bne1.da.uu.net |
| gg mom |
| #5 Kane[114570] |
| 12-233-180-134.client.attbi.com |
| JV should write a script that automatically deletes all fiction under 5 pages |
| #6 huker[114571] |
| bgp559251bgs.eatntn01.nj.comcast.net |
| who the huk would read a fanfic over 5 pages by somebody they don't know? -.- |
| #7 Mr.Mediocre[114572] |
| 149.149.205.38 |
| cute. : ) |
| #8 IcE-Inforcer[114573] |
| 209.105.210.34 |
Lol! What's the kid gonna do now, he's like what? 8? He won't win I hope. Unless he's some kind of supergenius.
This was good for it's length (or nm, shortness).
FUCKING_WHITE_BAR.
Someone's gotta do somfin about that. Me, this guy and some other guy were are victims so far. White sux.
Make the ghost eat the mom plz. Thanx. |
| #9 Amoeba_Boy[114594] |
| spider-wa021.proxy.aol.com |
Lol, pretty good, clever, and funny.
I'm also pretty sure there were no ghosts people, only something he made up to get his mom to go up to his room. |
| #10 Kane[114623] |
| 12-233-180-134.client.attbi.com |
#6, five pages isn't that much
o.o |
| #11 huker[114625] |
| bgp559251bgs.eatntn01.nj.comcast.net |
Yes, 5 pages is not long, but #1- this site is not exactly receptive to long fanfics.
#2- some stories do not deserve the length they are written to.
I could easily stretch this story to 5 pages by adding in some useless dialogue and events or inane descriptions...but who would want to read that? |
#12  [114630] |
| 12-222-60-60.client.insightBB.com |
| cute = 5 |
| #13 Adrenaling[114655] |
| CPE002078e0f4b2.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| kane, its quality, not quantity. or was it the other way around? bah, who cares. |
| #14 Swiss_Mercenary[114658] |
| h24-76-50-216.vf.shawcable.net |
| I didn't like it being so short, but, ROTF. GJ heh. |
| #15 Sexy^Orangutang[114663] |
| spider-tl031.proxy.aol.com |
even though I hate fanfics, i actually enjoyed this. but if its this short, post it on the forum.
ps fanfics still suck |
| #16 huker[114664] |
| bgp559251bgs.eatntn01.nj.comcast.net |
omg i wrote a fanfic that orangutang didn't flame to hell
my life is now complete -.- |
| #17 Freque[114694] |
| sdn-ap-007caburbP1924.dialsprint.net |
nice, i personally liked it :)
7-8 |
| #18 Black_Abyss[114695] |
| dialup-67.24.83.118.Dial1.LasVegas1.Level3.net |
10 year olds with life-size Barney dolls in their rooms, now THAT'S scary.
Nice fanfic though, 5. |
| #19 Cairn_Bloodhoof[114852] |
| 63-121-176-205.bhfc.net |
Well, that was clever, although I don't have a lifesize Barney doll, and I'm not 10, I'm 15. Yes, I am a Patrick incase you didn't catch on. Funny though. I enjoyed this, even though it was extremely short because in a way it reminded me of, ME when I was younger hehe. Yes, I remember those days lol.
Cairn_Bloodhoof |
| #20 Alman[124685] |
| 52.seattle15rh16rt.wa.dial-access.att.net |
I like fanfics, but that sucked. Two points I want to make...
A. If it's going to be in the StarCraft section, make it about starcraft, not some kid with a stupid mother.
B. If you want to write fanfiction, go to fanfiction.net. They'd love to have you. |
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