| #1 SiG.[131827] |
| adsl-34-23-225.mia.bellsouth.net |
Sorry about taking first.
This one isn't totally fucked up, like the first submission.. Only drawback is there is no comfortable black background, I had to settle for white.
Sorry raters, and Admin.. It's my first time submitting, and I kind of made a boo-boo.
Delete the first one. |
| #2 Ender[131828] |
| 128.226.4.138 |
| 1st!!! |
| #3 Ender[131829] |
| 128.226.4.138 |
muwahahah i pity everyone that's not first!!
damn you sig!! don't comment on your own work!! |
| #4 Ender[131830] |
| 128.226.4.138 |
| uhh sig... one quick question before i read. what's with the hidden comment about your girlfriend? |
| #5 pop_killer[131831] |
| Toronto-HSE-ppp3757383.sympatico.ca |
| all of you are fucking bitches. |
| #6 DarkRider[131832] |
| 198.134.2.2 |
Nice!
Though I had to read the parpar version lol |
| #7 Swiffel[131833] |
| ip68-14-142-34.ri.ri.cox.net |
| Highlighting all the text owns thx. And, like #4 said whats with your comment about your gf? :P |
| #8 Epoch[131835] |
| ool-182f07a7.dyn.optonline.net |
Wow, pretty damn good :]
Your writing can get a wee bit repetitive, and some more tiny and irrelevant details (yay) couldn't hurt.
9 :P |
| #9 Epoch[131836] |
| ool-182f07a7.dyn.optonline.net |
Oh and sig, for backgrounds...
<TABLE BGCOLOR="black"><TR><TD> *ACTUAL REPORT GO HERE :P* </TD></TR></TABLE> |
| #10 Kane[131838] |
| 12-233-180-134.client.attbi.com |
| Round Ten |
| #11 Kane[131839] |
| 12-233-180-134.client.attbi.com |
| holy crap this is like 10x longer than i expected |
| #12 Decay[131840] |
| 206.10.109.84 |
Note to aspiring Fanfic writers: IF YOUR GONNA WRITE A FIC, MAKE IT AS LONG AS THIS ONE OR LONGER.
As for the report, there were a few mistakes that didn't affect the flow of the report at all. But when was the report set? Before or after SC or BW? Anyways, good work, more plz. |
| #13 [131841] |
| mnet-baca244-13-199.monarch.net |
| this was well writen and nicely done. don't get discouraged by the lack of comments, as the site i gennraly biased agaisnt fics. keep going |
| #14 SiG.[131843] |
| adsl-34-23-225.mia.bellsouth.net |
This is kind of PRE-SC..
As you may have picked up.. The cloaking systems were "brand new".. And also, Science vessels were experimenting with Matrix sheilding.
Well, I figured that I wanted to put some hidden text in, and I couldnt think of anything to put.
;x;x
THX GUYS! *is inspired to write more*
AND AHKJASDHFKJSFHKJ EPOCH, WHY COULDNT YOU TELL ME THE BG COLOR EARLIER GDJSKF DKGSDHGK
The next installation.. about 5-6 more pages (out by next weekend probably).. I'll be integrating neat-o pictures I find laying around, or just draw freehand (like dag did on his fic, which never finished) and toy with them on paint shop ;x
CUZ I LOVE DOING HTML OMFG <3 ;x
More comments plz =]
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| #15 Redemption6[131846] |
| cache-1.sbo.ma.webcache.rcn.net |
Actually quite good. It looked really long, but as i got into it it seemed shorter. the beginning was a bit rough, a little boring, but it shaped up. A few things, first i think you downplayed the emotions a bit. Like when jason crashed into that protoss i assume? fighter? i think the others would have a bigger reaction than that. Especially since Margeret starts like saying "hahaha ig ot him' right after that. Another thing is your story is really predictable. like when you said "they saw4 people, including margeret in the lunchroom" i was like "wonder whos gonna join the team now..."
7-8 nice job. |
| #16 SiG.[131848] |
| adsl-34-23-225.mia.bellsouth.net |
Well, in the beginning I was only writing it to get my gf off my back.
She wanted me to write her a story.. But I began to get into it..
They are Scouts! ;x
Can anyone guess what that mysterious small light blue infrared blip was?!?!!? |
| #17 SiG.[131849] |
| adsl-34-23-225.mia.bellsouth.net |
Redemption, and..
I did make a version where the team got all upset about Jay's death.. But it was way too melodramatic.. It just didn't fit well at all. Maybe I can polish over that ? |
| #18 LameJoker[131850] |
| ip-209-23-0-81.modem.logical.net |
| Looked good, nice and long, even though I didn't read, prolly will tomorrow. |
| #19 Flash of Death[131852] |
| ppp139-mfe.tiagris.net |
"I can create a painting of a natural setting. I can create nature. I am God"-Flash of Death
this has nothing to do with anything, just immidating LameJoker |
| #20 Peon.Me.Plz[131853] |
| c-24-125-24-83.va.client2.attbi.com |
| observer!! |
| #21 DNAisLife[131854] |
| roam75-35.student.harvard.edu |
| Great read. Very engaging. |
| #22 Keanu_Reaver[131855] |
| max01-dynamic-64-65-141-204.sea.eschelon.com |
| as i said before, definately a quality story sig...i would make it gold just for the props to praetors story ^^ keep writing yo |
| #23 Sovereignty[131863] |
| 131.109.123.87 |
| honestly, the dialogue was very boring and childish IMO. Don't get me wrong. You have a good story. Like redemption6 said, it was very predictable. Work on your dialogues a little more, and add a surprise or two. Good work |
| #24 Lieutenant[131864] |
| adsl-67-39-5-82.dsl.dytnoh.ameritech.net |
Honestly, I didn't read any of it. I've been writing stories in chat and forum based RPGs for years so I'm a bit disenchanted when it comes to this sort of thing.
gw on getting a lot of positive comments, though. |
| #25 Chris[131867] |
| 169.199.140.249 |
Well, everyone knows I don't like fanfic.
But if you people are going to do something weird like that, this is a model for perfect... weirdness. |
| #26 ...[131868] |
| 64.106.73.235 |
This guy will answer any of your WarCraft III questions
http://schultz.la.unm.edu/CS220%20Discussion/ |
| #27 SiG[131875] |
| adsl-34-23-225.mia.bellsouth.net |
| Because we have War3 questions. |
| #28 Decay[131876] |
| 206.10.109.70 |
Indeed we do...
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| #29 afsafs[131877] |
| 12-245-197-43.client.attbi.com |
| testing ip |
| #30 SiG.[131889] |
| adsl-34-23-225.mia.bellsouth.net |
If this doesn't get rated, I probably wont bother to post my next big chunk.. I don't feel like posting stuff on this site if the raters are too ignorant of reading fics...
Don't mean to be rude, but THAT is kind of rude. |
| #31 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[131921] |
| h0010b59c54e2.ne.client2.attbi.com |
| raters are lazy. cattlebruiser has publicly stated in the past that he doesnt rate fanfics. booo forshame |
| #32 ZerG~LinG[131948] |
| p410-061.ppp.get2net.dk |
Wow!
Never thought I'd see any writing from you here :-)
Anyway I haven't read ít yet, so expect a *real* comment when I'm done, keke.
But already: good job on the lenght, 1 page fics are just no tnx. Interesting how a gf would MAKE you spend time at the computer. How come its the other way 'round with mine :p
Ahh bliss. |
#33  [131966] |
| pcp660145pcs.prshng01.fl.comcast.net |
| Writing anything on this site for the raters is a waste of time. A gold bengalaas means nothing -- it's the people who read and respond to your stuff that should make you keep writing. |
| #34 [131967] |
| pcp660145pcs.prshng01.fl.comcast.net |
Ignorance is not a factor in my decision not to read fics. I stick with rating reports because I have an appreciation for them and know a little about the effort that goes into them. Since I don't fully appreciate fics I shouldn't be the one rating them.
And to be completely pedantic about it, fanfics aren't even battle reports. Yes, they have developed a niche here where everyone either loves them or hates them, but they're still the bastard son of BR.com.
There's no need to talk down to me because of that decision.
Thanks,
~CB~
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| #35 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[131969] |
| h0010b59c54e2.ne.client2.attbi.com |
| whoa whoa whoa slow down, that green thing is suppose to be a bengalass? |
| #36 pop_killer[131975] |
| Toronto-HSE-ppp3757383.sympatico.ca |
who cares about it?
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| #37 ZerG~LinG[131986] |
| p456-33.ppp.get2net.dk |
As response to your forums posts SiG. this really should get a rating anytime soon. The thing with the unfinished stories were with 1 page fics, not your kind.
Get to it raters! |
| #38 jimmy[132072] |
| 144.139.221.32 |
Yeah I agree - the well-structured form of the fanfic (correct me if i'm wrong - I'm not even half-way up high school), even as CB said, it's the bastard son of br.com, makes me think this should get a rating, and a fairly good one. High silver at the least.
-NOTjimmy |
#39  [132697] |
| dhcp16635021.neo.rr.com |
I don't care for fanfics... with that said, what I did read of this was very well written.. but I don't feel it appropriate for me to rate it. This goes back to Praetor's fanfics, I wouldn't want to rate those either. I stick to actual reports from games.
As CB said, you shouldn't be writing this for the raters. You write this for the readers, and obviously you have people liking it.
I'm pretty sure this would be a gold; it's just my inherent apathy toward fanfics makes me a poor judger. I'll leave it for someone who does enjoy reading them. |
| #40 2Cautious[134877] |
| adsl-68-72-83-243.dsl.chcgil.ameritech.net |
| What's with the "hidden" text? Kinda weird. And why do you put Johns instead of John's (and other similar stuff...)? Is there some problem with the apostrophes? Otherwise, very cool! |
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