| #1 Anonymous[138348] |
| dialup-64.152.169.242.Dial1.NewYork1.Level3.net |
| k i know that was boring but we need some boring moments in a story. |
| #2 endersshadow[138351] |
| ool-182d2de6.dyn.optonline.net |
| please discontiunue this series |
| #3 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[138353] |
| h0003932041c0.ne.client2.attbi.com |
| YOU FUCKING STUPID IDIOT. This is quite honestly the worst writing I have ever seen. EVERYONE, yes EVERYONE on this website wants to you to stop writing. SO WHY DONT U FUCKING STOP WRITING YOU MORON. Nobody likes your horrible, boring, short, fucking stupid stories, let alone the fact nobody can understand them because of the lack of spelling and grammar. You are an idiot, and I can definitely say you are the WORST WRITER I HAVE EVER SEEN. EVER. And you are also the worst writer to ever grace this site. PLEASE, for the good of your soulshow some compassion and LEAVE. |
| #4 Jaood[138354] |
| hc6524652.dhcp.vt.edu |
| Yeah, very pointless putting out 3 barely minimal short stories instead of just merging them all. |
| #5 SiX5532ONE[138355] |
| pcp01379262pcs.selrsv01.pa.comcast.net |
Time makes his point as delicately as ever.
But yes, this sucks. No offense or anything, but maybe you should devote your energy to writing original stuff and not posting it here - I don't think this is your audience. |
| #6 ZerG~LinG[138358] |
| p423-013.ppp.get2net.dk |
| Seriously, if you wanna write stories on br.com, make them spectacular. Otherwise bring them to a more story focused site. |
| #7 2Cautious[138361] |
| adsl-68-72-108-167.dsl.chcgil.ameritech.net |
It lacks LIFE. Give it LIFE! Your characters are just little lasers that light up to make text! They aren't REAL. Meh. See comments on some of your previous works for some basic guidlines that might help...
4-5 |
| #8 AvaiL[138366] |
| c-24-30-250-7.va.client2.attbi.com |
Wraiths constantly flied out of the starports, ready to go, and the immense battlecruisers switched to combat mode.
I believe the word is 'flew' |
| #9 SiX[138369] |
| pcp01379262pcs.selrsv01.pa.comcast.net |
| Man, when a fanfic goes wrong, it goes really wrong, huh? |
| #10 Smeagol[138372] |
| nile-ext.nt.tas.gov.au |
i agree with 2-9
as i posted on ur first "effort" dont do fan fics unless they are really good or u put a lot of time into it
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| #11 PoachedEggs[138375] |
| CPE0010b5079e12-CM014320107014.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
It's all true. Stop writing blockhead.
No one reads your retarded rantings, so why bother cluttering up this website with them? I would rather put a hot poker through my penis then read this piece of maggot filled shit literature. You fucking suck the big one, so it's time to come to terms with that fact and never write again. |
| #12 Manius[138385] |
| ga-cmng-u2-c5c-74.cmngga.adelphia.net |
| Omg, "You are an idiot, and I can definitely say you are the WORST WRITER I HAVE EVER SEEN. EVER. And you are also the worst writer to ever grace this site." So, TIME, you're saying he's the worst writer you ever seen anywhere, and the worst writer you've ever seen at this site? Wow, don't be so redundant, please. Thanks. We don't want your useless rantings cluttering up this site. I'd rather stick a hot poker up my penis, than listen to your useless rantings which clutter up this site, TIME. So, do the world (and this site, which, is included in the world, so I really have no need to say this) a favor and shut the fuck up. |
| #13 Manius[138386] |
| ga-cmng-u2-c5c-74.cmngga.adelphia.net |
| Oh, and I hate you. |
| #14 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[138387] |
| cache-mtc-am04.proxy.aol.com |
| You fucking moron. I said hes the worst writer I have ever seen and the worst writer WHO HAS EVER GRACED THIS SITE. That means even the writers I HAVN'T SEEN. Fucking retard. Read before you flame or you'll look like an idiot. |
| #15 SupeRc0pKr[138389] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
"k i know that was boring but we need some boring moments in a story."
boring moments shouldn't be present in a story just for the sake of having boring moments. generally, these are periods of character- or theme-development, as opposed to plot-development, and shouldn't be considered "boring," just stints of little action.
don't stick something in a story just to make it a "well-rounded story" in name, give every sentence a purpose. |
| #16 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[138390] |
| h0003932041c0.ne.client2.attbi.com |
| Character developement? I've seen more character developement in soft core porn shows than in this shitty story. |
| #17 SupeRc0pKr[138394] |
| cache-da05.proxy.aol.com |
that's what i was suggesting, Time. there was maybe one paragraph devoted to a character's thoughts in this installment, and the author's comment made it seem as though he was just filling up space.
how long did it take you to reach some level of proficiency as a writer, Time? if you honestly don't like someone's writing, just don't read it; you don't have to demand that the author stop writing altogether. he might not be too adept now, but if he keeps at it for awhile he'll improve. |
| #18 Manius[138407] |
| ga-cmng-u2-c5c-140.cmngga.adelphia.net |
| Omg, TIME, you are making fun of this guys fanfic, yet your own battlereports are pieces of shit. Gj, fucker. |
| #19 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[138409] |
| 209-234-160-47.gen.twtelecom.net |
| LOL, ya, I proved you wrong so you say my battlereports are shit. Great comeback, d00d. |
| #20 PoachedEggs[138415] |
| CPE0010b5079e12-CM014320107014.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| Manius can't make a proper comeback without using insults from a previous post. :D |
| #21 Notjimmy[138437] |
| prx3.act.schools.net.au |
PoachedEggs, TIME, shut up both of you.
This is a piece of shit. Worse than mine (which wasn't so crap) |
| #22 Manius[138508] |
| ga-cmng-u2-c5c-140.cmngga.adelphia.net |
| LoL. Yes, I can't make a proper comeback without using insults from a previous post. I was doing that on purpose, because I don't like it when people make fun of other people's reports who really do try. I was making fun of the guy's comment for insulting the author of that report, not trying to use his insults for my comebacks. |
| #23 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[138516] |
| 130.94.107.156 |
| This guy may be trying his best, but unfortunately, "his best" is worse than "my worst" and is probably worse than "a monkey's worst" as well. |
| #24 NotJim[138548] |
| cvpp-p-144-138-156-109.prem.tmns.net.au |
| Suck |
| #25 Newt[138868] |
| dsl3-63-249-85-66.cruzio.com |
Okay, TIME. Do me a favor and shut up. You have no right to flame this kid like that. So what if he isn't Steven King? Don't put his flame out so soon. If you have suggestions for him don't cuss at him like a manical penguin. Be nice, bring it to him lightly. All your comments have insulted him by comparing him to a monkey or calling him an f-er. The only f-er around here is you. If you don't have anything to say in a "nice" way (whether it's bad or good) then don't bother saying it at all. I'm sick and tired of the way you're treating this beginning writer, and the same goes for all of you. I'm ashamed to write comments in such a crappy community.
As for you Anonymous, learn more about grammar, spelling, etc. You might also want to publish your writing somewhere where people will appreciate you more. As I said above, I'm ashamed of all of all of you. Also, raters, you should be moderating these comment sections, or possibly ban this mother f-er called TIME. |
| #26 Newt[138973] |
| dsl3-63-249-85-66.cruzio.com |
I apologize to all who may have been included in my last comment (particularly TIME). I'm not sure what came across me last night but whatever it was it doesn't happen often. Flaming isn't right, whether it's me doing it or any of you. We shouldn't treat other people like that and I guess I jumped the wagon on that one too, heheh.
The last paragraph I don't take back, with the exception of "As I said above, I'm ashamed of all of you." because technically, I called you a fu**er, TIME, doing an equal wrong. In either case you all should appologize to Anonymous Writer, because even if he isn't the best of authors (no offense right?) he doesn't deserve this, in fact no one does. I'm redoubling my efforts to, well, err, gotta go! And I'm really sorry for all of you.
~Newt |
| #27 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[139297] |
| cache-ra01.proxy.aol.com |
| newt, this guy has spammed 12 USELESS battlereports on this site, all of which were trash. Thats 12 chances to improve his writing. We have givin him tips on all of those reports and yet he still writes complete and utter shit. So now we just want him to get the fuck out, capice? |
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