| #1 The Wise One[146731] |
| 104-168.sulross.edu |
| I got enough semi praises on my Dartanium Chronicles to make a part 2 which is currently in development as we speak. In the mean time I decided to visit fantasy, my favorite type of literature. This is something I wrote senior year (last school year) and got an A on in English 5. I thought I would share it with you'll. This way I have an excuse to continue it as well. Remember I wasn't as educated then so don't be too harsh on the flames. |
| #2 Smeagol[146738] |
| 211.27.66.89 |
how the fuck do you find the time to write all these fucking fan fics :p
cant be bothered to read them thou so i cant comment =) |
| #3 BlueRibbon[146741] |
| host12.mvsd.com |
| Omfg, that backround color burned my Retna out.. jesus fucking christ don't use BRIGHT TEAL |
| #4 The Wise One[146744] |
| 104-164.sulross.edu |
| Its a brown font color on light green background meant to clarify the forest theme, i didn't see how it would be damaging to the eyes. And, smeagol if u read comment #1 i didn't write this recently, it was something i wrote last school year, that i had saved on a floppy. |
| #5 tempus007[146750] |
| ip-216-196-216-207.zif.fuse.net |
| Yeah, white on black is better. Also, watch you spelling in a few places (but the errors were few and far between, at what seems to be a relatively acceptable frequency.) Also, don't use the pronoun "your" when using third-person; it's like a slap in the face that breaks up the rythm. There are ways to rephrase that - "One" coming to mind. However, I think that the writing looks a little better overall. Hang in there! |
| #6 endersshadow[146755] |
| ool-182d28d8.dyn.optonline.net |
Christmasy :)
I was reading these before out of respect for the work you put into making them, but my mind won't be able to process many more fanfics.
Perhaps you could write a story blended into a battlereport? That "Choose you own Adventure" report comes to mind, maybe search Drefsab? |
| #7 EldritchEvil[146756] |
| nr11-216-196-186-252.fuse.net |
| Right. Anyway, I just skimmed it, but in the middle of dramatic sequences, NEVER use words like "dad." Use "father" instead, because it seriously breaks the mood. |
| #8 The Wise One[146758] |
| 65.67.229.172 |
| You've got a point Ender, I'll try to come up with some type of battlereport (probably text only), but do you know of any sites specifically made for fan fics of any topic, where you can submit, get rated, and etc. |
| #9 The Wise One[146759] |
| 65.67.229.172 |
| I thought i did use father :) |
| #10 Decay[146772] |
| 66.44.173.74 |
| try fanfiction.net, it has literally millions of fics on all sorts of different stuff, and I'm sure that there is an 'other' category or someplace that your works would fall into. |
| #11 firestone[146845] |
| pm3-72.tekdata.net |
cool I like fanfiction more then battle reports.
both are okay but with fanfic's you there isn't that predictable paturn that are in battle reports.
With that in mind please keep updating and if you do move your fan fic's please tell me where you move them to.
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#12  [146849] |
| Toronto-ppp272586.sympatico.ca |
| Don't start another fiction before finishing the last. |
| #13 TIME is not on YOUR SIDE[146930] |
| cache-da02.proxy.aol.com |
| Don't start another fiction PERIOD. |
| #14 Anathema[146944] |
| ip68-106-58-118.ph.ph.cox.net |
| uh oh! this was horrible! |
| #15 Minatour[147066] |
| kenn-dial-1-149.amerion.net |
| lol hey everyone wat-sup um i didnt read it really i just got bored and feel like being #16..havnt been here for a wile i need to ketch up on things |
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