| #1 Desert Demon[152623] |
| user-0ce2k63.cable.mindspring.com |
OMG FIRST.
It's a fanfic, keke ^_^ |
| #2 badme[152624] |
| pcp05314423pcs.norstn01.pa.comcast.net |
| 2nd! |
| #3 endersshadow[152625] |
| ool-182d2f86.dyn.optonline.net |
| Second o,o |
| #4 PeaceableGhost[152626] |
| 198.109.220.6 |
| 5th, I'm guessing. 4th if I got lucky. |
| #5 5th[152628] |
| 61.154.2.9 |
| woo 5th.. lucky number |
| #6 5th[152629] |
| 61.154.2.9 |
| ill read tommorrow.. *yawn |
| #7 LameJoker[152630] |
| pool-141-149-26-84.alb.east.verizon.net |
| I liked it, actually read it unlike most fanfics. Finish it up. |
#8  [152631] |
| 67.176.104.160 |
| first rater |
| #9 Desert Demon[152632] |
| user-0ce2k63.cable.mindspring.com |
I just realized that "finding a man of legend" should be more of "finding a Protoss of legend" or perhaps just "finding a legend." Man implies humanity, which isn't what Althoris makes of the prophecy.
Gogo rate LN? ^_^ |
| #10 DictatorForLife[152633] |
| CPE00a065cb0ceb-CM014100005949.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| it was kinda short. that's all i have to say. |
| #11 AnonymousNolifeLoser[152634] |
| 217.61.128.78 |
I really liked this, so plzz, don't waste time making br's, just write more on this fanfic.
There is just to d--- few of these...:-(
And yes, that was a request, to all ya Report Writers (how dare I!?!). |
| #12 [152635] |
| 67.176.104.160 |
| "omg fanfics suck write br lolz!" |
| #13 AnonymousNolifeLoser[152636] |
| 217.61.128.78 |
Oh ya, and GTA: San Andreas is released in 52 days, 4 hours, 54 minutes, and 26 seconds In the USA. And 55 days, 4 hours, 53 minutes, and 1 seconds left until GTA:SA is released In the UK and the rest of Europe!!!
Plzz, tell everyone the joyous message! |
| #14 Desert Demon[152638] |
| user-0ce2k63.cable.mindspring.com |
Billboards ahead :P
LN: LOLZ! |
#15  [152639] |
| CPE000ea6388836-CM00080d371c83.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
Too few of these? Do a search on monty pylon. Reading . . .
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| #16 [152640] |
| CPE000ea6388836-CM00080d371c83.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
Alright, read it. You have to proof read, as the following sentences indicate:
"Cho'gas's voice was gravely with age and disuse."
"'Go, ask the Council for support. I will provide support if needed.'"
The story was interesting enough, though the formating was poor. Don't use BR tags ( if you did ) - use proper spacing when you want to introduce a new idea ( and, therefore, a new paragraph ). Also, try and work on your punctuation/font choice and size.
Other than that, not half bad at all ( though it was short ). 6. |
| #17 Desert Demon[152641] |
| user-0ce2k63.cable.mindspring.com |
Thanks for the pointers. Yeah, I needed to proofread...written in the middle of the night, and I figured in my tiredness it would have come out well. I guess not :)
I'm not quite sure what you mean about the punctuation...could you give me an example?
Sorry about the brevity also, I felt at the end like I should have written more, but had written myself into a stopping point. Maybe I'll work on these when I'm more awake next time :D |
| #18 goldrush945[152642] |
| CPE0080ad8222be-CM000a735cb980.cpe.net.cable.rogers.com |
| I'm more of a fan of having a line space between paragraphs than just a tab. |
| #19 AnonymousNolifeLoser[152644] |
| 217.61.128.78 |
| Thanks for the advice Dagomar... |
| #20 wakiki[152645] |
| cable-24-196-14-148.mtv.al.charter.com |
| Hey, neat, make your next one longer though. As in...like three times longer :) I liked it though. |
| #21 LameJoker[152646] |
| pool-141-149-26-84.alb.east.verizon.net |
| I dunno, if I see a big long fic my narrow attention span can go right out the window. I like the shorter style myself. |
| #22 TwistedNecro[152649] |
| lsanca1-ar54-4-3-202-139.lsanca1.dsl-verizon.net |
| Yeah. Very much longer. =D |
| #23 FS[152650] |
| pc-24-151-22-092.newm2.ct.charter.com |
| omg fanfics suck write br lolz |
| #24 Chris[152652] |
| astound-66-234-209-235.ca.astound.net |
| ^- see above comment for details. |
| #25 wakiki[152665] |
| cable-24-196-14-148.mtv.al.charter.com |
| v- see below comment for details. |
#26  [152699] |
| c-24-8-188-140.client.comcast.net |
| details |
| #27 maareek[153592] |
| 150.176.83.30 |
There's a guy with a big heart...and lots of time on his hands. Care to do my next report for me?
It was short...and sticky. Reminds me of how I spent my weekend. |
| #28 Desert Demon[153611] |
| user-0ce2knu.cable.mindspring.com |
Sticky? Wtf?
I was driving one of my friends home and we had just seen a drumline and talked about how it was almost sexually exciting. So I'm like "Okay, but don't have an orgasm in my car. That'd be somewhat hard to explain." I think she just laughed but I really don't remember anymore. |
| #29 Desert Demon[153612] |
| user-0ce2knu.cable.mindspring.com |
Haha I forgot a comma.
Two commas.
PWNED BY COMMAS. |
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