| #1 -=GoldKnight=- (125.newark-18-19rs.nj.dial-access.att.net)[5109] |
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sux...or no sux?
Microsoft word tabs and spacing doesnt show up on this...next time i hafta manually do it. No paragraphs this time sorry. |
| #2 GhOsT~LiZarD (ppp3-108.digizen.net)[5128] |
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| Dud this saga kicks ass gimme more! |
| #3 Phuckin-Rhetard (sdn-ar-007azphoeP246.dialsprint.net)[5132] |
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What the hell is this...
No pictures, damn you.
Naming your units is condemned damnation. |
| #4 Slicer (ip230.portland12.or.pub-ip.psi.net)[5136] |
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Blood: extra points.
Ripping off that SC cinematic for the first part: no points.
It's too cheesy: negative points.
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| #5 .Praetor (cache1.cwo.com)[5363] |
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Not too bad for a quick Starcraft story, in my opinion. I enjoyed it a little. Some suggestions though:
1) Blizzard is GOD. My first rule in writing fiction is that anything, ANYTHING, contradicting the Blizzard story line is anathema. If you do want to use the cinematic, make the dialouge and action exact. Raynor was not in command. Also, I like to find excuses to not have one-shot kills. Makes the story seem more like the game.
2) When writing, paying attention to detail is important. Not describing everything, but the little details a person actually there might notice, it makes them seem like they are there. As it is written, it seems less real, more like an idea than a story.
3) If you do want to continue, and there is no reason you shouldn't, contact a bigger Starcraft site to carry it. It also helps if you have a committment or a storyline already planned.
.Praetor
www.sclegacy.com/phoenix/ |
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